My family and me was moving to a new house and I saw a mysterious house. So I went

to it and it was so good so I looked like I was in paradise and it looked like I was in my

own house so I went to cook dinner and my family was helping me to bake a cake and

it was a chocolate cake so I ate the chocolate cake with my family we were unpacking

our stuff and  my bedroom was up stairs. It was me and my sister we had a buck bed

and the house was a hill so I went on the house roof and rolled on the roof and it was

cool so my whole family joined but not the adult’s.

I had fun and the adult’s didn’t care about going on the roof rolling down. So my aunty

and the whole adult went in the house sitting on the couch and the floor the baby's were

sad because they wanted to play with the other kids but they weren’t allowed so they

were so sad. But  the other adult’s helped them have a great day but that didn’t work

they still wanted to play with the other kids so the other kids heard that the baby were sad.

So they went to cheer them up by painting a picture for them and so the other kids helped

half of them to paint our old house and half of them were painting our new house and it

was so fun and the baby’s were happy again we done everything together like cooking,

painting and going swimming and those were fun but the adult’s were having more than

as they were watching TV and going sailing that was not fun with us so we asked the

adult’s if we come and they said no because it might be dangerous for them so they were

so sad but they still went so three adult’s stayed because of the baby’s.

Manase, hi hinemoa your story was great but you don’t have fall stop’s in your story’s.